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(Enchanting Melodies) Chapter 403: Wisdom’s Path

🕑 Added 2025-01-04 14:00:35 +0000 UTC

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athass_prkr

Thanks. I suppose making the chapter twice as long made fitting everything a lot easier. The feedback I got was pretty awesome and helped a lot. I'm happy I was able to make it better.

Afterdark230

I like the rewrite, it reads so much better. More and more things you put in motion made sense. The lore now makes more sense and it’s a hell of a lot more congruent. What’s even more of a surprise is that this chapter felt longer and more rewarding of a read. Coupled with your usual cliffhanger ending it’s perfect.

athass_prkr

Just updated this with the first part of the rewrite. I kept a few things, but if you noticed, it's significantly longer. Please let me know if it feels better than the previous chapter. Again, I don't mind updating it again depending on your feedback.

Afterdark230

I agree it is a start in the right direction. You added the backstory and then it got murky. Look forward to the rewrite.

athass_prkr

Yeah, I'm planning on rewriting the whole thing after I get some rest. I was so out of it that I just kept writing without even thinking about what I was really doing. I genuinely thought about not posting this one tbh, but I thought that at least, even if it's bad, you guys would help me make it better.

Monzter E

I think its the pacing, its to abrupt in its flow. Not really flowing between beats in the chapter, there isn't any real urgency for the duo to really accept fake solomon. So why should they decide now, why not wait and think on this. Both harry and voldie are not psychologically noobs but masters in manipulation and reading with very few limitations. And fake solomon's goal is to capture/trap them but is not really convincing in my opinion... But to reiterate good chapter with some rough edges...

Vortex

Same it feels rough but the idea with the layers thing was great

Monzter E

Good chapter but rough, not sure if its the twist or how the chapter ended or the clues of solomon but it didn't mesh well together. It continued for the previous chapter, next it gave some fresh info/mystery about solomon but not about harry's goal, then voldie got hooked then one last 'trust me bro' then twist...


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