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(EM Vol. 2: A Wandering Melody) Chapter 111: Wilted Saplings

🕑 Added 2025-11-27 14:02:02 +0000 UTC

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athass_prkr

Spoilers :)

Gr1ffin

Flows better and more realistically. Nice job. However, this kinds of begs the question of what happened to the old gods? I can't remember if they had a part of this yet...

athass_prkr

Thanks for your comment. It really got my creative juices going. I rewrote large chunks of the chapter, so please let me know if this is better.

Jaws

Great chapter. However I feel you missed out on some potential world building when you had the elder tell the children of the forests history. These people have been connected to the werewood network since their creation, it is a integral part of their culture and people, so wouldn’t the else use it to tell their history like they would when they teach their young? Also, the betrayal Leaf experience could be linked to this as well as the Elder could remove a veil or some kind of illusion they built into the network to hide their history. After all the first rule of story telling is show don’t tell.


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