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(EM Vol. 2: A Wandering Melody) Chapter 42: A Bloody Wolf

🕑 Added 2025-07-27 14:00:14 +0000 UTC

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Marius Petrauskas

nice

athass_prkr

That's actually a good point. I'll try to work on it. It's kind of a bad habit of mine, and I really appreciate the feedback. Thanks :)

Damon Fitzgerald

You use the word 'really' far too much. It is fine when it is Harry speaking as it is just his way of speaking. But here both Cregan and Daphne said it when it wasn't needed and it made them sound rather like Harry. I think that is probably one of your biggest weaknesses in that you have trouble making characters sound different. Your worldbuilding and plot are really good though. I am very much enjoying your writing.


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