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Halfway Broken - Chapters 67-69

🕑 Added 2025-06-10 07:14:10 +0000 UTC

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The Foreign Traveler

How Mihawk actually travels in his small ass boat? Here’s a good a guess as any. Mihawk isn’t swept up in the Storm…the Storm is swept up with HIM. He cut a gigantic iceberg in half with one swing. Nough said. Anyway-! Edit 1: …fast enough, in her skills Captain Clay to enroll her as an Ensign… …fast enough, in her skills “that Captain Clay had enrolled her” as an Ensign… Edit 2: …Even if things “they” did go the same… …Even if things did go the same… Edit 3: …with the alternative plan he’d come up… …with the alternative plan he’d come up “with”… Edit 4: …as strong as possible “or” the backlash… …as strong as possible “for” the backlash… Edit 5: Both “her” and Kuina nodded… Both “he” and Kuina nodded… Edit 6: …a meditation position they “thought” him to… …a meditation position they “taught” him to… Edit 7: …both of which Kaya “and” given him… …both of which Kaya “had” given him… Edit 8: …Chopper and Kaya “and” run off… …Chopper and Kaya “had” run off… Edit 9: …get out of her before or “sense”… …get out of her before or “since”… Edit 10: …her thighs parallel to it “an” held her… …her thighs parallel to it “and” held her… Edit 11: …that took “under” the third such… …that took “until” the third such… Edit 12: …those hands developed “another” yet another set… …those hands developed yet another set… Edit 13: …the low moan a moment later “match”… …the low moan a moment later “matched”… Edit 14: …the man’s Fruit to “possible” help… …the man’s Fruit to “possibly” help… Edit 15: …whose presence had made Luffy’s lips “twice”… …whose presence had made Luffy’s lips “twitch”… Exit 16: …If, as I think, “they” Marines and World Government… …If, as I think, “the” Marines and World Government…

Novus Peregrine

Debatable if it would work, given that Marco's flames can't do the job and they should be pretty close to the same thing. More to the point, though, they have no contact with Whitebeard. He wouldn't be likely to let them try, given they aren't an allied crew of his. Particularly not when he's on a warpath.

Jared Andrade

Have you thought about using spirit healing to repair whitebeard damage heart cause roger. It wouldn't really add anything to his strength but would massively increase his endurance and no longer make the fight a race against the clock.

Novus Peregrine

Kuina's still the number three in power, so it's unlikely there will be too much falloff. Remember, the original story showed the 'Monster Trio' a lot. When serious fighting happens, she's still one of the most likely to be involved. Particularly as she's broadening her skillset.

BPellet

Will we see a surge in Kuina's importance again? Kuina has a lot of first mate moments so far (where she's in charge when Luffy is busy), but I'm worried about her relevance due to Yamato. A lot of Kuina's other moments came from her being the second strongest on the crew and I'm kind of worried about her importance with that no longer being the case. Just wondering since I quite like how you've written Kuina so far. Anyways thank you for the chapters.

Novus Peregrine

I've honestly been avoiding doing that on purpose, since once I do so they are more-or-less set in stone. While I have a solid idea of them, characters can surprise me with how they end up developing. I'd hate to miss out on something perfect just because I didn't think of it when I wrote down a set of definitive panels like that.

Dylan Pomes

So, we know Luffy can see all the Kinks of his crew. Any chance we all could get a peek? ;P

Novus Peregrine

I've yet to explicitly define Nami's hybrid form, but I personally consider it to be along the lines of what some Rule34 artists draw a humanoid Rainbow Dash like (Very Much NSFW Example: https://rule34.xxx/index.php?page=post&s=view&id=12913795&tags=rainbow_dash_%28mlp%29+wings+) Eh, they didn't know the Discovery would be able to do that at the point she got it, and it's honestly still better for Vivi to have it. The whole point was for her to easily be able to go back and forth to Alabasta, which just the ship teleporting wouldn't make plausible. There IS another teleport Fruit in the series, but honestly probably won't have it be one of the ones that ship eats, since eventually Vivi will be able to simply open a door large enough for the Discovery. Right now she's just too new to the Fruit, only having actually had it a couple of months.

WhatAFungi

I like this story a lot, and I thought this chapter was great. I’m having problems picturing/remembering what Nami’s hybrid form looks like. Lastly, I’m happy with how Vivi is turning out, but now I’m thinking about what if the Discovery “ate” the door fruit instead of her. Teleporting flag ship sounds perfect for this setting. Lastly, best wishes to you author, with your unspecified ailment.