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Book 5 Early Access: Chapter 18
🕑 Added 2021-12-15 17:12:46 +0000 UTCThis month's chapter has a lot of talking in it. It sounds boring, when I put it that way, but really, talking can be incredibly intense. Conversations are where most drama lives, after all, and often the main goal of a writer is to stitch together these exchanges in an engaging and interesting way.
Incomplete information is vital for tension to grow. What information does one person have that the other doesn't, and what lingering doubts can be brought to a head? These are good things to ask while writing these scenes.
Chatting across a kitchen table can get rather dull, and dull things tend to be forgettable to your readers. That's why setting is very important: forcing the reader to pair some mental image to a piece of information is going to make it 100 times easier for them to recall it days, weeks, and months down the line.
This 'visual memory technique' can be very useful—so don't forget it, lol!
Book 5 Early Access: Chapter 18
Comments
Morphine
In this chapter, if the ronin is Perverted, when they walk to the church after talking with Toshio on the rooftop it says something about imagining two nuns, and the thought being "alluring" I think this should only show if the ronin is attracted to women. Or at least mention it in a way that doesn't imply ronin that aren't into women (like mine) would be aroused by the thought of two women banging
Really Willy
Wow, this chapter was definitely a kunai through the heart.
