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33. Atomic dreams

🕑 Added 2022-01-20 02:26:26 +0000 UTC

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yaaa. I'll have to warn them in author's note or something.

Jacob Armstrong

Gonna be unpopular, but I probably would've dropped this story had I read this chapter without reading the comment that this would all be over in two chapters. Even then, the resolution a couple of chapters later feels too close to deus ex machina for my tastes. The whole situation felt very contrived to me. I feel sorry for any RoyalRoad readers who will get this chapter and not be able to immediately read the next chapters.

this is the last chonky twist - it's all linear and science from here :]

Heavenward

Bruh- please go a little easier on the twists lol. Just wanted to see my man Dante and cute little Delta explore the system and do sciency stuff.

argh, going to yeet the extra instances. :{

It seems you really like the phrase "a second priorly" :)

it's a twist - his body has been living out a life without a soul. everything coming back onto the tracks in next two chapters, don't worry

Luis Rubio

no!!!! everything was going fine and now this!!! no!!! why you ruined it like this!!! the story was very good until this chap, fuck!

> what was the problem with just letting them have that win like Icarus he rose too fast too quickly and got burned by the sun! :p Also it shows the caring side of Delta and that if he didn't save from the virus he'd end up-perma dead for sure.

0xFFF1

This turn of events is extremely dubious. I'm withholding my judgment for now, but a 12-year timeskip is certainly quite the move. I want to see how you smooth it over. I'll hold the 'what? You guys relaxed and didn't expect Kliss to dodge her vows when you've been planning to do the same to yours? Isn't that naive?' until after I see how you make this work. However, what was the problem with just letting them have that win? Too progression fantasy-y for you if it's too smooth sailing? I can see that being an issue because if they managed to dominate the overseer and control the town they would've been completely unopposed for however long it took the Empire to discover Kliss was compromised.

Please don't tell me the old Soviet man I knew and loved is no more.

Wait. 12 years have passed since that night??? And how is Dante's body functioning without a proper soul?? And for some reason, Dante believes he hasn't unlocked the system, and everybody else has forgotten what happened to a male infant 12 years ago? Is it just Dante's nightmare? I'm genuinely confused. It is the most unexpected plot twist I've ever seen.


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