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Dating in a World on Fire 0.55

🕑 Added 2024-12-27 08:59:11 +0000 UTC
Dating in a World on Fire 0.55

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Ariane Barnes

I was worried about this game needing more structure, a better planned outline to follow. My plan was to have specific endings for each chapter, and sort of wing the in between stuff. I worried that won't work. But then I was blessed by the YouTube algorithm who fed me a video from someone I don't even subscribe to "How to Write a Novel with the Save the Cat Beat Sheet" by Grayson Taylor. I do subscribe to channels that help with writing, so maybe that tricked the algorithm, but this video was perfect. The "save the cat" beat sheet is a list of 15 story beats that result in a compelling story, I watched this with DiaWoF in mind, and I pretty much have the first 4 beats in the story already done. Origin and Meet Relay = #1 Opening Image, first meeting with Samantha = #2 Theme stated, except she doesn't state the theme, so I'm giving her new lines "We live in a broken world. Not much we can do about it. That shouldn't stop you from finding love, if that's your goal, or finding opportunities to improve the broken world if you can." Makes her sound more like a therapist than a roommate, but it works. Date with Relay = #3 Setup, maybe a little long for a story beat, but its important to the story, and finally the new "Meet Alex" = #4 Catalyst, a call to adventure that Relay is excited about, but your feelings... Well that's what the next section is about. The beat sheet has 11 more story beats, and I used it to finish a full story outline, including alternate choice versions. So now I have a clear outline of where this is going, and an ending.

Ariane Barnes

Thanks. Yes the Samantha twist was meant as a twist, while I was developing the game. I got the idea for Samantha as a substitute for alt-Rachel in SITAR, and my second idea was, "what if she was an AI that lives in VR?" because "future". The only hints I dropped, other than her being very helpful and willing to pose nude when asked, was that her scenes all started with a drop in from above, like you were putting on a VR headset. Also the fact that you couldn't touch her was suspect. That of course means she is not your second roommate, which turns out to be your sibling = the other gendered player character. The only hint for this is found in the "former heir" origin. (And the screen where you choose the gender of your character.)

LB876

I REALLY enjoyed chapter 2. Whole lotta interesting world-building, character-building and, well, buildings - some neat-looking stuff on the River Walk. Also, the tonal shift IS pretty hefty. I know you've said it won't be the entire chapter, but that is a doozy of a left turn. Not a bad one, just a big one. One question, though: Was the "twist" with Samantha intended as a twist, or am I just really dense and missed that about her in chapter 1? Cuz I was pretty confused / surprised. (I don't think that R&M reference is that obscure, and I laughed at it. I'd be OK if it stays.)


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