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Book 3 Chapter 9

🕑 Added 2025-01-03 14:05:30 +0000 UTC

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Rodmin

Damn, Count Vespars son (probably the older one I would guess/"hope") killed that guys family?

Gopard

Thanks for the chapter! He is a sweet boy -> "He is a sweet boy (You missed the apostrophe at the start) Take care of Tumlus while I am gone. -> "Take care of Tumlus while I am gone. (Same thing as Above) "Any problem with people" -> I'm really not sure what this sentence means in the context was it meant to say "We didn't have any problem with people." or am I missing something :P "and once a couple was punished, people started reporting" Pretty sure you mean "Once a couple (of people) WERE punished..." right? From the context and not "ONE couple was punished for something so people started reporting..."? ;) and anyone who thinks writing with a dip pen is easy has never tried. -> Well writing NICELY isn't easy lmao! My grandparents had some of them and we kids tried to use them... writing something isn't hard even if you're only used to fountain pens but not getting smudges everywhere and making uniform letters is a nightmare I agree^^ "If we need to find somewhere else, we will" -> something missing here "If we need to FIND THEM somewhere else" maybe or anything to clarify the structure and meaning a bit^^ could also replace the "somewhere" with "someone" but that would make it less clear at hinting he talks about finding Knights! And yeah to the point I was really wondering about the knighting... I kind of expected him to maybe give it to soldiers who distinguish themselves during the raid? But perhaps giving out Knighthood before will also raise Moral and make people more willing to fight the slavers (beyond the obvious of not wanting to be enslaved and murdered ofc) in order to obtain Knighthood or Baron status or something?

Zachery Prochaska

I just would love to see the shock on the nobility's faces when they FINALLY realize how he keeps his armed peasants from stabbing him in the back. By promoting from within as much as he can.

Carson Spencer

Thanks, i’ll fix that.

Paxmorgana

Good chapter, nice progress and spooky foreshadowing. Only part I see any issue with is during Amos' conversation about Edward's new job at the publishing house, I genuinely thought he was talking to Kal, so when there was talk later about making Kal a headman and later a knight I was very confused and had to reread. Maybe a mention of Edward awkwardly scratching his ears in anxiety about the position he feels ill prepared for, just so you know it's Edward and Amos talking now for sure rather than Amos and Kal?

Carson Spencer

I should have put “we” instead of “I” there. I will fix that because that is exactly what he’s planning on doing. There’s just more pressing issues right now.

tibbish

"I wish I had enough time to create a printing press. " Couldn't he just draw some pics and hand off the 'plans' to his smith and work worker again? That was more or less what he did with other stuff. It'd still take a month or 2 to get it done I'm guessing since they're probably overloaded right now. Thanks for the chap


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