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False Prophet B:3 C:18

🕑 Added 2025-02-07 14:24:37 +0000 UTC

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Zachery Prochaska

I wonder if we are going long term with this relationship to get past the "woke readers are allergic to the medieval practice of 15-16 year old teens being fair game" thing, to develop her enough that it feels like a relationship of equals (minus the isekai knowledge/godlove cheat), or both.

Carson Spencer

You are correct and yes that does need to be rewritten.

Rodmin

I loved that chapter, great overview over many things. Excited to see when he will get his first new knights.

Paxmorgana

Great chapter. The following sentence reads oddly to me, it's just after Amos declares he'd like to split the remaining county into 3 baronies. "Everything north of the Nore is ten kilometers south of Kerisi and north of Bicman, and the land is near North Cove." I think what you're trying to say that there's going to be one bordering Plimgus at the Nore River going up to near Kerisi, then the second including Kerisi and Bicman and part of the swamp to the north including Berman (the reclaimed swampy village I might've forgotten the name) and potentially Melnon, then the third would be the literal north cove aside from the county seat plus a bunch of soon to be drained swampland. There might be a better way to word all that, but maybe just expand on the section a bit because as is it reads confusingly.

Gopard

Thanks for the chapter!


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