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Demesne 307 - An Itch In Her Mind

🕑 Added 2023-06-04 16:00:02 +0000 UTC

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SCM2814

Lori has few people she trusts not to screw things up, and there are some things only Lori can do. Besides, that wasn't the terms of her agreement with Shanalorre.

Justin Case

>The firewisps drew out and transferred heat to the air around her This makes it sound like they're generating heat rather than getting rid of it. >Lori wasn't displacing to keep them in centere in centere->centered Or at least I think that's what you were going for, though it still doesn't fit that well I think. >something the only living person actually capable of some amount of Deadspeaking that Lori knew of couldn't provide. So you're clearly setting the start of this volume up as a refresher on things, but in that case you shouldn't phrase things like this suggesting that Shana is the only living deadspeaker. And yeah two dungeon binders previously died trying to defend this place. I can't understand why they didn't just send Coldhold and evacuate the whole village to Lorian. It would have been *far* safer for everyone involved. It honestly feels quite stupid to have Lori trying to defend a place that isn't her dungeon like this. She's far more vulnerable than her own dungeon, and if she dies Lorian dies too. This whole arc just feels like forced out of character stupidity.

Pi

>from place to place, and the even if left heavily imbued remove 'the'?


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