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Demesne 371 - Disproportionately Hurtful

🕑 Added 2023-11-19 16:00:02 +0000 UTC

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SCM2814

Yes, but Rian had been mentioning his name, and the length of time had not been enough for Lori to forget it yet.

SCM2814

Thanks for the typo spotting. Yeah, that duplication… I forgot to clean it up. Will fix… in a bit… Rian realized because even if Lidzuga had just stepped away, Lori was no longer using his name. Even her memory isn’t THAT bad. Rian had also been using his name to remind her, but she was still referring to him as ‘the Deadspeaker’. Even if in her head she doesn’t refer to people by name, like calling Karina ‘brat’, she still called people by what name she knows them by. So that behavior is unusual for her.

Justin Case

This chapter had a lot of errors in it. >we'd been the only one he was the only one >with more crop that need crops >tending to the seedlings, cutting and plants we brought cuttings >and you know go around pointedly not bothering to refer to him by name. know -> don't >Come on, what Lidzuga did can't rank nearly as bad as Landoor. I made an error in judgement out of enthusiasm. I think that "I made" should be "He made", but it's a little uncertain. How did Rian even realize she was doing this rather than just thinking she couldn't remember his name? It's kind of a long running issue for Lori to not remember names. The comparison to how Lori uses Landoor's name making her reconsider is pretty funny though. >The feeling of hating that Rian had a point was… well, simultaneous comforting and annoying. simultaneously Lori knows she needs Rian. Lori's logic on the correspondance is surprising. I didn't expect she'd respect the privacy of the correspondance at all, even in such a meaningless way. >Thick wooden posts anchored supported a roof delete anchored >They sat at one of the tables of the outdoor pavilion that acted as River's Fork's dining hall and were joined by Riz. Thick wooden posts anchored supported a roof of straight branches and straightened sheets of bark, keeping leaves and occasional small branches that fell from the dome above. The interior of the dome was shaded enough to be noticeably cooler than the area around it, but the same dome dulled breezes that might have moved the air. Almost this entire paragraph is duplicated from 3 paragraphs above.

BagFullOfLizards

What petty thing is Lori doing? Is it just referring to the deadspeakers by their role instead of their names? Because that seemed entirely in character for her, especially when talking to someone who knows she has trouble with names. Maybe it would be a bit offensive if she said it to their face, but referring to people by their jobs to a third person is something that happens all the time.


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