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My Classmate Emma Lindberg - Chapter 15, Page 8
🕑 Added 2022-07-27 16:01:03 +0000 UTC
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SimVenus Arts
Thanks for your feedback! Regarding the sentence, I agree with you. "all the way" is better. What do you think about "Wow! It went in all the way so easily!" ? Regarding Emma's lips, I think it's the camera angle and Emma's expression that make the lower lip look thicker.
Robmur
Very good story arc, and can't wait to see the trouble Emma and gabby get into at school but then I think of how they dressed the day before and it may be uneventfull. That said, and if I may express myself. The fifth line down where Emma says,"Wow, it went all in already " might be stated as " wow it went in, easily, all the way" and this may be my cell phone resolution but it appears Emma I wearing a red gag or had smeared her lipstick something terrible. Not criticizing or condemning. Just voicing my thoughts. And I do apologize if I offended.
