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Take a Look at Me Now

🕑 Added 2022-10-09 23:00:05 +0000 UTC

Comments

Donnie

I agree with Jonny. Criticism should always be constructive. Actually the story is very well written IMHO. Yes, there are grammatical errors but it doesn't detract from the story. Some of the artwork does make the girls look too young, but the story is good that they are 18+. Something I noticed in life is that the majority of girls are either blessed with T or A but very few with both. But considering that the MC, S and shortcake all have the same father and both girl's mother's are large chested, it seems a little unusual shortcake lost out. At least she could have her mom's booty. 😆

Jonny Boy NY

Everyone likes to be a critic at times, but overall MrDots, you're more than fine! Not everyone is going to like works that are done by artists and creators. If you don't like a particular game and story line - then don't waste your time with it or comparing it to others AVN's, simple! If People want a specific AVN to their own liking, then heck, create your own AVN and stop criticizing those actually making it. Either way, keep up the good works MrDots! You have my support. Cheers! - JB NYC - :-)

Buxom Wench

Appreciate your reply very much. I do enjoy your game and continue to play. My only problems is with the MC. His dialog just makes him seem very weak to me. He's 25, worked his way through law school, had an aggressive start to his career. Did a total 180 when he left...was he totally pussy whipped by his girl friend?

HearszAM

There have been some little clues on certain paths that things could become really complicated for the MC if he continues to see more than one girl (see: Trish and Shortcake, Friend and Ashley) and that will be continued on in this next release.

Dave Davidson

Meh, the writing is fine. Not as good as Melody or DPC's work but this is up there with the top VN's. I can count on one hand the VN's I've played that were better then this. All I'd like to see is more story branches and consequences to your choices. The MC can't just mess around with every woman he sees without consequences. The hotel shouldn't play on such a rail either, there should be choices with that too that have consequences good and bad. Overall though I think the story is great so far, but anything can be improved.

HearszAM

Appreciate the honest feedback. I've never claimed to be a great writer - I'm pretty sure I failed English in high school! :D However, what I have compared to most other people who do this kind of work is a great imagination and I still have the enthusiasm to write every single day that I switch my laptop on. Regardless of the fact we've been doing this for nearly six years, I'm still learning every day and I'm aware that there's always room for improvement. MrDots and I have put plans in place now so that when our fourth game is released, the areas in our games that are lacking will be significantly improved. Where I could have changed things previously is the style in which I write, which is a balance of conversations between two or more characters and character thoughts. I have no intention of following that pattern again for Game #4. I'm already looking at completely changing the style while also learning from other successful VNs to see what areas I could do better.

Buxom Wench

The MC in this game is weak, but that's only because the writing in general is not well done. The "novel" part of Visual Novel is just not up to par many other in the genre.. Creators need to take some writing classes. That said, everything else about the game is very good. The concept is good, the visuals are good...I'll see it through because of that.

Jeff Sandau

He does seem kinda... bland? Maybe a bit whiney? Indecisive? But I love the girls so much, I'm gonna' stick with the story. I've loved every single thing MrDots has ever done, so I'm going to trust in the story that is being told to us.