Shadow (the_shadow_rising)
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Update and Deleted Section (12th July 2017)
🕑 Added 2017-07-12 20:41:47 +0000 UTC Quick update. I am back from travelling and so back to writing. Been desperate to write while I've been gone but never had the perfect moment. So I have already dived back into it and have a plan for how much I want done each day. Going to spend the whole night working on the first sex scene so hoping to get a huge chunk of this (enormous) section done today. To give you all a rough idea, this first sex scene needs to be (at minimum) around 130 pages. I am aiming to write *at least* 10 pages today (which is a lot in one day for sex scenes if done properly).In the meantime, I have been thinking of the section I mentioned I had deleted from the story. I have taken out the bits I wanted to keep and either moved them into different places or rephrased/added to them so that now they work perfectly. I will add this section here for Patrons (again, not charged - that is for stories).
BE WARNED. This section is a lead in between two points of the actual sex. It comes from very early on in the sex scene but CLEARLY CONTAINS SPOILERS for the story. If you want the story to have any surprises - like you do not want to know where, who, how, positions, or anything, DO NOT READ THIS DELETED SECTION. While it is, obviously, a deleted section of the story - and thus not in the story as is - it still reflects the story/characters/actual first sex scene, and will spoil the surprise for the story. READ IT AT YOUR OWN PERIL.
Given this, it may be asked why I deleted it and why I am sharing it? Well, I deleted it because it was boring, way too slow, and didn't reflect what I wanted in the story. That has been fixed. Some of it is good, but as it is written it was, well, not good. As for sharing it, that is for two reasons. First, some of you said you don't care about spoilers and want to read anything. Second, because I have taken out what I want and can now see that the section and how it flows is definitely not used, it is a deleted scene (well, section). As such while it does reveal a lot about the story it does not reveal exactly how the story flows.
As before remember that this section is first write-through material, has not been edited to remove repetition or make it hot, nor has it been checked through to make it flow, etc. Moreover, I deleted it because it was too slow and I found it boring, even given how detailed the story is. Even so, it should give you some idea of the difference in detail in this story to others.
~Shadow~
