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🕑 Added 2022-04-15 02:56:30 +0000 UTC187 and Chained - 16 are both at 50%.
188 - Will be another Erwarth PoV - I just started this morning.
Spent a lot of time this week reviewing early chapters and started work on re-writing Emerging.
The first twenty-five chapters are consistently in need of a re-write, to paint a clearer picture of places and situations. Though there are a couple of chapters, I don't want to re-write from a cleanup perspective but reconstruct completely to get rid of the exposition.
Comments
Tjark
Yeah, Lome succubi are really cool. I hope they'll stay with Amdirlain even after their royals (and the rest) are freed .
StormyAngel
Yay Erwarth! I really enjoyed her last chapter. Best of luck with the re-write. I don't know if you plan to release it piecemeal or all at once, but I'll look forward to reading it either way when you do.
Glenn Wright
Not going to do as much of it as my brain wants me to. The chapter count approach I had earlier limited my use of some characters, and some I'll address but others will remain underutilised. A lesson for my next story.
Glenn Wright
Yeah, that's certainly one of those I want to clean up. Almost have it a Mind Palace conversation instead of the awful colours I used.
Xtriver
In my opinion there are several chapters in need of revision particularly in regards to whom is actually thinking inside Amdirlain’s head. I understand writing three people arguing while being influenced by one of the participants can be difficult, but for me it was somewhat confusing to read.
Benjamin Medrano
Good luck with the re-writing. That's always painful, in my experience.
