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Abyssal Road Trip - 203 - Into the darkest desire [fade out version]

🕑 Added 2022-06-07 23:27:10 +0000 UTC

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Glenn Wright

Thanks - will make some adjustments

Jonathan

Hmmm...I'd probably cut after she gets pinned down on the bed as it's more suggestive without actually describing anything. Leaves a chilling feeling instead of just abrupt end. That and add a bit more description about Moloch when she's calming down (or make it immediately clear the succubus and Moloch are different, like "that succubus and then later with the Demon Moloch"). I think he's been mentioned before but it feels like it comes out of left field. With the NSFW version it's fine as there's the entire intro & talk but w/o it the name drop feels sudden.


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