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Abyssal Road Trip - 475 - Beauty in the flames

🕑 Added 2024-12-23 11:29:39 +0000 UTC

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Gopard

Thanks for the chapter! I wasn't sure before but this certainly seems like perhaps Klipyl has finally found something more than just the desire for friendship and to help the other find their inner piece and satisfy their needs? I could be interpreting her thoughts of Kadaklan from a wrong perspective but I feel like she does feel clear lust for him not purely bc she thinks that would help him, but because she wishes to experience him in a way because she loves him? I was wondering if perhaps Jinfeng started to love her as well, but its always hard to say in this arc, will the immortal Monk find their feelings of love like Farhad did? Or will they "just" be archieving en enlightenment allowing them to ascend to a higher reality, because they found a realization about inner peace in a certain conversation piece. :)

Glenn Wright

It's probably also a bit odd as Klipyl is behaving herself :)

James Skinner

Thanks for the chapter!

Glenn Wright

Those are hopefully smoothed out now.

Glenn Wright

Klipyl kept flipping me into first-person PoV - I thought I had caught them all. Wil fix.

CringeWorthyStudios

“but the protective ones extending towards me grow brighter” > wrong perspective? The rest is in third person, at least. “Please advise which of the times below is suitable, Oracle Hashiguchi Amaya.” > the way this one is laid out looks like the letter is addressed to the Oracle. Might be worth reformatting. “content sigh across my skin” > perspective again? Not sure if it’s just that I’m tired but this whole chapter feels a bit off. “in his Kadaklan's nose” > issue should be obvious “A sense of the woman enfolded Klipyl in a gentle burst of light” > Phrasing feels odd. Nothing wrong, just unusual and might be worth taking a second look at it. Aww, Amaya-sama is so cute. Can we keep her too? Am likes picking up strays anyway and even if this one had a home surely she could do with a bit of a holiday for a bit, right? Thanks for the chapter!

Karl Tageman

”in his Kadaklan's nose.” One word should go :)


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