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The Grind (And Helping Heather Potter) Ch.26

🕑 Added 2023-09-21 15:42:56 +0000 UTC

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IEU097

So, after re-reading the chapter I do have one teeny tiny gripe. It just erks me when I read "still snowing snow". How about "still falling snow" or "freshly falling snow". If you want to get poetic with it, how about "he walked in about an inch of the still dancing snow". Or, to be more impactful "driving snow". Also, when I read the part when Bella was talking about Atlas looking at them, I could totally see Sirius in the background saying (in his best Steve Irwin voice), "Right, before us stands a White and Black Atlas. He's looking right at us, so we must be cautious. They're known to breed with anything that moves. This one appears to be still in his late teen years, so he's likely extra voracious. A right bastard and motherfucker, this one."

IEU097

"Eat shit Tom!" 🤣 Also, everytime I see the name "Phoebe" I immediately picture a young Alyssa Milano. Yum...

DamnedThrice

This story is way too good. Which means that there is unfortunately no real way to keep up with my voracious appetite I have for this story.

Sir Earth

great chapter!


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