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Chapter 19.5: Grint Chocolate Chip

🕑 Added 2024-03-16 18:12:58 +0000 UTC

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David Karlsson

Does Bas have plans for David Yates with how he schemes and butters up to him? Or is that just Ruperts view of events and he doesn't see the point of this first meeting?

Andrew Mckeown

Reading fresh, and still comes off pretty great, wouldn’t mind another Rupert pov at some point. The line of emma pointing out how very progressive the lads were acting was a bit out of place timewise for me, the word ‘progressive’ itself I mean. Don’t think it was really used at the time but not entirely sure what was, maybe ‘modern’ or something like that. Could be wrong and not a big issue. Favourite part that might not get mentioned much is just the non dialogue interaction between bas and emma that Rupert describes. Just captures them really existing in a very cool way without a formulaic, MC says cool thing, girl blushes, reader go wow, way it can sometimes be done. Not that that itself is always bad, but can be a bit easy. What you wrote just seemed more sincere, naturally in each others space without being a big outward deal says a lot more. Anyway, fuck typing out on my phone this is annoying, look forward to next weeks chapters.

Bar Calak

Haha I figured

Anonimacho

This was supposed to be a reply to Pope Yoda :P

Bar Calak

Very little I think, some like small stage play and local British parts. The only one I remember was Felton in planet of the apes. That's fair, which is what I was attempting to do. Rupert trying to solve his own problems. Smooth is good! Haha now I can focus on Bas and the story for a while.

Anonimacho

Rupert is 17 or 18 years old. You just reminded me how unbearable Watson became. I hope MC teaches him that hard work is better and more rewarding than victimization.

David Karlsson

How so?

Pope Yoda I

Not bad. I think your handling of Rupert's existential crisis was smooth. With the exception of Radcliffe's bonkers post-HP roles and Watson using a childhood packed with sexual harassment as fuel for her role as a UN Ambassador, I've actually got no idea what any of the OG cast did later in life. While I wasn't expecting a 14 year-old (or however old Rupert is at this time) to wax philosophical, it wasn't unwelcome to see one of your characters grappling with their future. I think I'd like to see how other cast members see themselves and their inevitable splitting once all 7 movies are done. I don't want MC to be the only driving force behind change, so please feel free to give others agency as well. Or show how MCs actions encouraged others to seek their own change (a more difficult task). P.S. In a future chapter, perhaps a reunion party once HP land in Universal opens?

Evertime

Evanna Lynch means there is a non zero chance that Bas will see AVPM, which I just find hilarious

Sohaib Malik

The story went from the third dimension to the fourth dimension by including other perspectives 👌

David Karlsson

About that monologue, JK is talking about Evanna Lynch I assume? And also, with Radcliffe being Neville, does that mean Jamie Waylett (The guy who didn't come back for DH1,2) is no longer cast in favour of Matthew Lewis?

Bar Calak

I think the next pov is best for fans. Though not for a few chapters at least.

Bar Calak

Phew! Happy that the effort paid off. Believe me I know the feeling, it's 230 am where I am.

Bar Calak

Totally. Rupert's his own person and I think a good average for the other child actors in HP so his pov sort of acts as everyone's voice somewhat. Crazy in a good way haha. It's why she relies on him. I was actually trying to do the opposite of what Rowling does in the books lol. Ron is like a quasi seer (for comedic effect imo) in the og story. Here he's inadvertently wrong instead of right with the gossip stuff - like most boys are. Emma I'll save for later. Much later. Yates was fine. Competent but just a jobber instead of someone with real vision when compared to the other directors. A better screenplay will help. Longer the comments more I enjoy reading and responding. Never apologize, I love it.

MimicReads

Ty

Andrew Mckeown

Half asleep, so ain't got a lot to say, though for me this is pretty decent contender for best chapter yet. Great alt pov.

Bar Calak

Please sir, I'm goin' as fast as i can. Glad you're enjoying!

David Karlsson

I think Rupert has a similar role in this story in that he's the "average" good bloke with the extraordinary friend. It's good to have such a character to not be too swept up in Bas's craziness and lose touch of what the average co-actor experiences in contrast. It grounds the story a bit. About the pacing over big events, if I wasn't eager for new updates to get to his reunions ASAP I wouldn't have minded an interlude chapter for short premiere and then general movie reception among fans perhaps, given that this movie was so completely different almost all ways from our timeline. I hope we can get the audience reaction to it in some other way later on instead?

Bar Calak

I was walking past swords while writing this chapter leaked in lol. Yes they're never not cool.

David Karlsson

Great job on Rupert. One can only respect him. Honest about he feels but too good of a person to act poorly on it. His conversation with Jo was good as well, trying to emulate Bas someway wouldn't go well at all. Did she mean completely crazy in an endearing way, at least? Lol. So there's a Jo and Bas meeting next chapter? Also glad we got some background on events from someone who is more in tune with the gossips in the tabloids, news and also the kids on set. I'm assuming many of those in charge of the project are aware of his time with Gemma and are running interference where possible as he didn't get lambasted with questions on the premiere. But I like how realistic that was. As a smut chapter it didn't matter but there was no way they'd got away with it with nobody noticing. And did Gemma do a little sly bragging to someone with Emma's piqued interest after the pool party or was that because he worked out ahead of the shirtless scenes? We got some clues to Emma as a character also here even if we didn't get her PoV, so that was well done. It's perhaps lucky few will completely believe a freshly turned 14 year old had sex with a 19 year old like her. I didn't have much trouble with Yates for doing his job by the script. With the better screenwriter I believe he can do a decent job like he did with order of the phoenix. Apart from the book discrepancies (with several missing chekhovs guns from the others) he made a cinematically good movie within the circumstances imo. He'll hopefully make an above average film at least with the input of JK, Bas and the screenwriter. Great job on this chapter author. Just from Ruperts PoV we got answers to a lot of background questions to MCs past actions which was well done. Sorry for the long comment

Bar Calak

Maybe its just my writing but my intent was not to give Rupert's thoughts on the new director but to let the audience know that theres a change in a way thats not just stating new director. I'm glad the rest of the chapter was clearer though. I'll see what I can do for continuity if it's feeling disjointed. My structure for the story is pretty simple so far. Each movie (or event) is about 4-5 chapters with one or two bookend interludes to transition into the next saga essentially. I'll try to make that clearer. And haha no, its just a metaphor. Rupert is more inclined to go his own way rather than follow Bas' path - i just used swords as a thematic tool.

plainMCU

Thank you for the chapter! Love the insight from other characters. Can't really wait until next time. Wish the chapters came daily lol

Anonimacho

Damn whoever convinced you to do more pov. I think these should be few and just to show us the image of the MC, nothing more. Definitely knowing what Rupert thinks the change of director doesn't excite me. (Just that part, the rest of the pov was great though. One thing I do think you should do, is to give it a little more continuity. There is an important time jump every half chapter. No event has taken more than one chapter so far. And at the moment it's not a problem since Bas is still young. But in the future there should be a little change for important events. By the way, does that ending mean that Rupert will get his dick wet? Thanks for the chapter.

Leafninja91

Very nice work on this one. It's great to see other actors prospective on Bas.

Heraclitus

Great chapter. Really felt Rupert's inner drama here, projected through a teenage boy as it was. What, swords will always be cool?


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