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What could have beenโ
🕑 Added 2023-10-20 20:55:36 +0000 UTCThe original insult that L gave MC...
It was... not nearly as harsh...
One of my alpha readers were like: no. that's pathetic. fix.
And that's how MC got eviscerated in broad daylight.
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Spoilers for chapter 5 technically
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Spoilers for chapter 5 technically
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Spoilers for chapter 5 technically
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Spoilers for chapter 5 technically
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Spoilers for chapter 5 technically
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Spoilers for chapter 5 technically
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Spoilers for chapter 5 technically
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Spoilers for chapter 5 technically
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Spoilers for chapter 5 technically
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(One early rough exampleโand the scene structure of the end was very different at the time!)
#A dispassionate call for Lestrade to do the work required.
"We have a job to do. I require your services, for once. I recommend attempting not to be the reason it fails."
"Mmm. *How* inspiring," they say, meaning little of the words by the tone.
*if (loneWolf)
"Didn't think I'd see the day. The great detective, needing anyone, ever... ${mc_name} ${mc_lastname} asking for my assistance. "Their jaw ticks, and their mouth turns sour. "While telling *me* to be better. The person who can't handle their boredom, laments daily the crimes are too tame, and
*if (cope = "eating")
loses all resolve when there's an appetite.
*elseif (cope = "taking drugs")
drops all sense for their favourite inebriety.
*elseif (cope = "gambling")
ironically has a habit for making the most idiotic bets.
*elseif (cope = "smoking")
chases an ever darkening of their lungs.
*elseif (cope = "inaction")
would win awards for passion for idleness.
*elseif (cope = "berating")
is everyone's *favourite* little personal fault finder.
*elseif (cope = "drinking")
possesses a frankly impressive fondness for inebriety.
*elseif (cope = "taking risks")
possesses a frankly idiotic fondness for risk.
*elseif (cope = "experimenting")
possesses a moronic lust for playing with fire.
What could be more inspiring than that?"
*if (loneWolf) #"That's somewhat fair... well. Let it never be said miracles do not happen."
You give your goodbyes and turn to leave.
"Let me escort you, ${mc_lastname}. The crowds here..."
"I can handle myself."
"I know. *I do*. But why do it? Why take the risk? For my peace of mind, would you let me?"
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Roman
"I do sort of like it when he's mean to me" ๐
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King Nothing
I feel like the roasting within an inch of our lives really added character.
