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Update 1.22 with Gallery!

🕑 Added 2016-08-31 10:49:21 +0000 UTC

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Regonoreth

So, I don't think it's odd that Dozer might seem less complete if you look at it like that—a lot of the things you mention for the other characters didn't even show up in any significant way until Week 2 and Dozer's only up to Saturday. That said, I'd also class most of them as gimmicks. They're not the core of who a character is, they're just some interesting situation that helps show them off. Spence isn't "stripper best friend", he's a confident methodical protective type-A who's found he also likes being a ridiculous tease. Chester isn't a geek with a traumatic past and a protective brother, he's a contagiously-enthusiastic puppy romantic with low self-confidence in a lot of areas. Darius has been flinging his major gimmick in your face since the start because flinging things in your face (figuratively, possibly also literally) *is* his major trait so far. In a way Dozer's been doing the same, except it's less obvious because most of his traits aren't showy. At all. But there's been enough so far that I think if you're looking for some central core you can find it in his drive towards sports medicine, and the stubbornness, practicality, and meticulous care that goes along with that. (Most of which traits also apply themselves well to bonsai, I'd imagine...) And yeah, also the taciturnity gimmick.

Richard

So I had a few thoughts on this update First off I see where you are coming from in regards to the routes being similar, however I personally find that having key points that are consistent across all routes help keep the timeline straight and make the dissimilarities that show up later more pronounced. That said I'll admit that the whole thing between Darius, Spencer, and the MC would not have worked as well with the Elton Courts scenario so I can see where the differences are helpful too. Darius, why do you put up this front all the time? Take a chance and let someone get to know the real you. This was an informative update overall Darius is a very complex character and the one I am most looking forward to learning more about. One thing that bothered me though was at the end of his route if you went with the "not really" option his attitude and actions seemed less playful and flirtatious and more hostile and sinister, which while I wouldn't mind seeing a darker side of his personality doesn't really fit with what we've seen from his character so far. Spencer I know he means well and all, but I don't think he realizes how much of a dick he can be at times, especially where the MC is involved. (maybe he just cares too much) Dozer has potential but compared to the other characters he seems less complete. Not to criticize it just seems like you aren't entirely sure what direction you want to take his character at the moment. I get the whole mysterious vibe he has going it just seems like he lacks a core foundation to build off of, for example the Coach has his book the whole thing with his ex and his depression issues, Spencer has being long time friends with the MC as well as trying to establish a relationship there and his secrecy regarding his job, Chester has the whole nerd culture thing as well as his bad past experiences and having an overprotective brother to deal with, and Darius is the quintessential "bad boy" with the rebellious attitude and stunt driver thing, as well as his dismissive attitude towards sex and relationships in general, but still has deeper layers he keeps hidden from everyone. Comparatively Dozer lacks any real connection with the others, he mentions that the MC reminds him of his friend back home but beyond that it doesn't seem like there is any real reason for them to want to hang out together, though that may become clearer as we get further along. Honestly I might just be overlooking something obvious here so feel free to correct me on that one. Overall I did enjoy this update and look forward to seeing what comes next. Also this ended up being a lot longer than I intended so I apologize for that, but at any rate hope it is at least somewhat helpful.

Kindling

Some Darius lovin! Thank youuuu 😍


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