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Chapter 83 - B1 Epilogue

🕑 Added 2025-04-22 14:00:10 +0000 UTC

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Draith

It's only been implied so far, specifically with the stories about Althon only interfering when things get bad, but he doesn't interfere much in his local domains, never mind actually visit Balthum/Perry's domain. I should also add something about scrying interference at long range

Draith

Didn't occur to me that the linebreaks I had in Scrivener wouldn't transfer over. They've been added now. Sorry about that.

Julkur

I'm a bit confused by the last épilogue. Was Balthum the last Magus of Perry's Domain? How can he have faked his death decades ago and still know Bevel? Or is he connected to the Way Between and knows about her living there?

Jason Hardman

Yeah, the perspective shifts were confusing. Some breaks definitely needed. Even a few extra blank lines could work.

Alexander Belousov

Small suggestion. Your Epilogue contains several different points of view. How about putting some sort of dividing line between them. Does not have to be anything fancy. Just a line of dashes or something. SOMETHING to indicate that the point of view is changing. Without it, things are a bit jarring, since there is no indication of a changing point of view.

Julkur

Thanks for the epilogues and the great story. Just in time for the end of my Patreoning :) I'll be back in some months to binge again. Miniscule edit advice: perhaps you could split the different POVs with a line of *** or - - - - It was a confusing when it changes to another part. As I've expected 2 epilogues in this chapter, I thought that Nexxa was sitting atop of the chamber of Ascension.


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