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Bryce’s Big Act in The Diaper Dimension: Chap 2

🕑 Added 2018-09-19 17:20:52 +0000 UTC
Bryce’s Big Act in The Diaper Dimension: Chap 2
Bryce’s Big Act in The Diaper Dimension: Chap 2
Bryce’s Big Act in The Diaper Dimension: Chap 2
Bryce’s Big Act in The Diaper Dimension: Chap 2
Bryce’s Big Act in The Diaper Dimension: Chap 2
Bryce’s Big Act in The Diaper Dimension: Chap 2
Bryce’s Big Act in The Diaper Dimension: Chap 2

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They in fact have the same names as the Lutece twins ;). Funnily enough a lot of these ideas didn't start out as intentional references, but partway through I realized that it was very similar to something I'd seen elsewhere, and so I retconned some names and places to work as light parodies, without it being too important to the plot. They definitely had the voices of the Lutece twins in my head. :) Really glad that the balance of everything feels about right. Once you've read the same chapter a hundred times it becomes very hazy for how it flows and reveals. One good outcome is perhaps the ability to condense lengthy explanations and backstories into living snippets, ensuring to just include the key points, and let implication fill in the blanks for the things which had lengthy descriptions the first time. It may just be what better writers mean when they say 'show, don't tell.'

I'm kind of surprised that she didn't just *poof* to the diaper dimension while wearing the headband. Still, I love the build up, the suspense is so very much palpable, so real and has me practically begging for more. But alas, likely a fine wine or bourbon, we must be patient while you work your literary magic. Oh and I feel that you struck the perfect balance between scientific talk, her kinky thoughts and everything else. Nothing was too drawn out. I find the twins to be an interesting pair, reminiscent of Bioshock Infinite. Keep up the great work!

Capybara Angel

Cushy cuddles & Snuggles, either way, *ANY* work you put out is amazing. 👍😍👍

Author's Note: I've never quite struggled with a chapter of anything like this one. Every draft was *huge* and contained far too much detail about how the quantum technology supposedly worked, hints about what was coming and how it tied into other stories, etc. Eventually I realized that it needed to be pared right down, it was just too big and boring for what is meant to be a kink story. There's some ideas which I didn't get to use, which is a shame. At the same time, I'm very happy with how I managed to get Bryce's personality, not as neurotic as I'd normally write, nor a horrible person like most of my attempts to write confident characters.


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