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Writer's Blog: If I Only Had A Brain
🕑 Added 2022-05-20 16:05:36 +0000 UTCI've been so distracted lately that yesterday I forgot to push the "Publish" button for the post notifying everyone that the 2.0 version of Chapter 6 was up! Sorry about that, and Chapter 7 should follow by this Sunday.
There's less changes to Chapter 6 than there were to Chapter 5, in large part because Chapter 5 was twice the length and thus had more stuff to be changed. Ultimately, I decided not to merge 6 and 7, especially since this new version of Chapter 6 ended up being 2,500 words longer than the initial draft.
What's New:
-Much rewriting and general polish.
-Additional options on how Button can react, including new questions about the attack and Button being able to simply blink in confusion when Nick expresses jealousy.
-Ace Buttons interested in Rosy will no longer think prurient thoughts (and other tweaks).
-More nuance with Nick's dialogue throughout the entire chapter, reactive based on his relationship with Button.
-It's now much more obvious that Adsila is being a manipulative beepity-beep. (Sidenote: I adore Adsila and would pay to see her and Reese cage fight.)
-Repetitive dialogue over Hope's BRS was taken out. I'm looking into using some of this scene to flesh out John's Chapter 5 departure, mostly because I can't bear to completely delete the phrase "my composure is being held together by bobby-pins and dental floss."
-Button and Nick can now engage in a pseudo-mini-fight over Nick keeping secrets. This tension doesn't fully come to a head yet, but it revolves around the new clue added in Chapter 5 and also makes it a lot clearer that Nick is hiding things about Unity/the explosion from Button. (Things which will be completely revealed by the end, but no longer in a way that blindsides readers. I added foreshadowing, y'all!)
-Starting in Chapter 3, Buttons who call John by his first name will have their internal narrative refer to him as "John" instead of "Dad."
Link: https://dashingdon.com/play/wildelight/mind-blind-20/mygame/
Comments
charyfairy
I support your efforts to keep in the dental floss line and/or any other lines that make me snort-laugh
Mich
Ah, I'm so behind on the 2.0 versions. I'm gonna try to catch up on it all today!
saarebasra
As an ace Rosymancer: YAY and thank you! 💕
Alex T.
Adsila and Reese cage fighting would be the most limp wristed battle in modern history. It would be like the two old men fighting in Up. I’d still give it to Adsila, though
