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0.9 Prologue Dev Focus

🕑 Added 2024-10-11 20:59:29 +0000 UTC

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Falloutbabe

It's about some more evil thoughts. If MC undresses in the camp, she should definitely arouse some desires. As for the GY in the outback. Your list mentions being an au pair, so we can build on that, that MC won't do her GY in Sydney or a larger city, but that she might end up in some backwoods town with a few hillbillies.

Blue Swallow

I'm not sure I follow the thoughts. Undressing action when? And wrong attention from who? What deployment? Au Pair in the outback? Haven't even written the Au Pair GY yet.

Falloutbabe

I have some suggestions regarding the gap year. In my opinion, this could be a little more exciting and dangerous. For example, her undressing action could attract the wrong kind of attention, or her deployment in the city, which does not lead to death but causes a longer stay in custody, so that she has to be released by the embassy or a hostage rescue team. The au pair could also attract the wrong kind of desire if she is placed on a farm in the Australian outback.

Blue Swallow

This is exactly what I was asking for, expansion or not, requires looking back and changing some things. Thanks!

Javier Ricaurte

I don't know if this counts as an expansion, but if you fail to get a passing grade in High School, Claire can still go to the graduation ceremony even if she outright says that she didn't pass as long as she doesn't choose to specifically drop out. Same thing with University, even if she outright says " I'd not be graduating" she still goes to the ceremony. On the other end of the spectrum even if she chooses to graduate early it's the exact same ceremony as if she graduated with everybody else, down to Ava still being the Valedictorian. I also feel that a Claire focused on her studies to the point that she had a perfect 4.0 GPA and declined to graduate early should probably snatch that Valedictorian spot from her.


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