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FLTL Ch 203. Shortages

🕑 Added 2025-04-03 14:35:00 +0000 UTC

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Jermel Purse

First love the chapter I pitched in $15 to subscribe because I couldn’t take it anymore. I had to know what was gonna happen next. It’s nice to see the small time jumps. It feels like the story is pacing a lot better now. About this chapter, it felt right, but not quite right. Let me explain. I get that they are discussing shortages. What we’re bringing in where we’re gonna fall short and it makes sense to have this conversation. It makes sense to discuss all the details they brought up how much we did we think we were gonna need how The new consumption of meat is helping reduce what we were thinking we were gonna need but how these new 26 people are gonna add to what we’re gonna need and figuring out new totals all of that made sense. It’s the way the conversation flowed that was not quite right. It didn’t feel like a natural conversation two or more people would have with one another about where we stand and what we need. I’m picturing them sitting at a table, babysitting near the fire having this conversation and it’s not the topic that felt wrong, but the words used during the conversation. It felt sometimes robotic the way they were speaking, not necessarily natural. Not like a conversation two people who knew each other would have it almost felt like a draft. That’s the perfect way of describing it how you would draft the conversation would flow as opposed to how the conversation is actually written for a script or something. I hope that makes sense not trying to be critical I just felt this was one of those chapters that has great importance in setting a tone for where we are now I need to go in the future, but it just needs to touchups for the conversation so that it feels more natural anyway onto the next chapter like I said I can’t wait to see what’s next

Kuzunalis

That is indeed the last option if nothing else can be done to improve this situation. But with all the work going on in the village, the labourers need as many calories as they can get, especially in the winter. So it's a better option for them to find a way to supplement their food sources while ensuring the workers are getting as much food as they require.

Gabriel Melnik

They could ration the food portions to one bowl per day.


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