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FLTL Ch 219. A Man In Need

🕑 Added 2025-04-25 14:30:05 +0000 UTC

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Jermel Purse

OK, excellent chapter, but that interaction with the man and his child hopping off the wagon and what proceeded afterwards that whole conversation didn’t seem natural. It made sense for those events to occur, but the writing please don’t take offense. It just seemed more mechanical less fluid. It wasn’t like a natural authentic conversation. A person might have it was robotic. I often think of the Star Trek character. Data when I read some of the writing here it’s a bit stiff. I clearly grasp the message being said the point being made and they are good points, but they’re stiff a bit mechanicall. Not sure if it’s a first book thing not sure if it’s a second language thing. I’ve seen authors deal with both. It works this way out in the long run. The conversations are getting more natural anyway onto the next chapter.

Claudio Silva

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