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FLTL Ch 55. Journey

🕑 Added 2024-08-14 14:30:02 +0000 UTC

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Matthias S

TFTC! Yay, we have our first invention, one of many I hope! I am uncertain about the whole traveling POV. I mean they need to get to the city and back in one piece, otherwise the story will be over quickly during winter. So even if bandits attack, I feel it lacks tension. Unless you use it to introduce some relevant monsters or characters for later, it feels just like filler to me. For example, what happend in the first part of this chapter? I dont see plot, I dont see character development. Of course it might be foreshaddowing something I don't know about yet... But now I am knittpicking on a high level, plus we still got the first invention up and running ;-)


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