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FLTL Ch 99. Wheelbarrows

🕑 Added 2024-10-25 14:30:02 +0000 UTC

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Kuzunalis

You are right, it was an error on my part. I have corrected it now. And I don't mind constructive criticism at all. You are more than welcome to point out such mistakes in the future as well.

Kuzunalis

Good idea. I will consider making a higher tier which will include the rights to name a character. The story already has a lot of characters, but it is going to have a lot more in the future, so you all will certainly get a chance to name a character.

Damien

Thanks! I think when you get a few more chapters under your belt you should move to price the patreon like primal hunter does. Or at least have the 5$ option be more enticing to bring more people in. Also add a membership option to have a character named after us??

Jermel Purse

I noticed one issue and it’s Important to mention. The phrase for example you see it appear twice in this chapter, but it’s almost back to back. It was when they were talking about moving grain and coal with a wheelbarrow. The first use of the phrase for example makes sense. Here’s an example but using that same phrase again almost in the same paragraph it’s grammatically OK but I have some college professors that would pick at that. They would ask for a different transition phrase to be used or just use the word or since you’re giving two examples back to back. Again, not being critical cause I want to be a jerk but eventually, I’m sure this will get published and an editor would pick that up.

Kuzunalis

Yes! Not sure how I missed it! Thank you for pointing it out.

Scorte89

"He looked at the carpenter." I think you meant blacksmith here!

David

True, dragging is by far the worst option! I imagine a stretcher would be best to haul an animal over the worst terrain. It would be easy to make and they put it in the wheel barrow when they're not using it. Either way they'll have their work cut out for them if the hunting is successful

Kuzunalis

Yup, it's all relative. The alternative may very well be to drag the hunted animals on the forest floor. A wheelbarrow might not be ideal, but it does make it relatively easier.

David

I don't think hauling stuff in a wheel barrow in uneven forest terrain would be easy. I like using my wheelbarrow to haul dirt around the yard and I agree using them around the village would be tremendously helpful, but I think of all the obstacles, pits, and soft or sandy soil you'd have to deal with in a forest, particularly with a wooden wheel instead of rubber. Might be a different story if you go along a used game trail and have someone else to help you push it up a hill or out of a rut, which is probably what you're thinking with the hunting parties, I'm just saying it would be hard to move a heavy load off the beaten path in rough, wild terrain. I'll admit though, if the alternative is to carry the load a long way, the wheelbarrow would be more appealing.


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