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FLTL Ch 118. Cheese And Butter

🕑 Added 2024-11-21 14:30:00 +0000 UTC

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Kuzunalis

Thank you so much for your wishes!

Jermel Purse

Crap I forgot to say this in my other reply get well soon. You mentioned a medical issue of some sort we all like your work. We just want you to get well soon and keep writing.

Jermel Purse

Ok it is taking a bit long to get through this portion of the story. It’s supposed to be a feast. Some of this seems a bit out of place. That might be the wrong phrase, but to me the feast should’ve been 1-2 chapters. One chapter preparation distribution the other chapter from the perspective of the children, which was amazingly written by the way. Instincts that chapter in particular should’ve been by itself. Literally at the end of the feast chapter you could’ve had someone stick their head up where is the mercenary? Sort of ending on a cliffhanger and the following chapter is where you follow up with instincts discussing wher he was and why instincts came into play. Notice how someone pointed out that this feast which is a one day event I’m guessing is taking longer than the caravan ride. That’s the feeling we’re getting reading this. It’s taking a little too long. 2-3 chapters should convey everything from the feast to the instincts and then we need to get on with is the bandit group going to raid the village or not because that’s taking a bit longer as well.

Kuzunalis

no. i had uploaded the wrong chapter name by mistake yesterday, but i changed it later.

Jeff

Wasn't there already a chapter named cheese and butter?

Jazzinald Von Hiemdallvinar

One day festival, takes longer than going to the city and back lol

Thundermike00

Its not the runt. It's that mercenary


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