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June 2023 Monthly Poll Winner - Harry/Fleur - You're Losing Me Part 3

🕑 Added 2023-07-06 15:59:01 +0000 UTC

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Arctis_Shox

Don't worry; the next two chapters are already written, and the Bill & Fleur talk is the start of the next chapter (it's about 1300 words long). After that, it's all Fleur/Harry for the rest of the story. Both chapters have a fair amount of fluff and smut between them. As far as her being passive and dragging this out, I agree that she is very OOC in doing this. Part of what I've tried to show from the start is that Fleur tried to communicate her issues with Bill in the past and was basically ignored. Because of this, she's struggling with self doubt, and this is impacting her in being able to effectively communicate with Harry and Bill. Part of her transition in the fourth chapter is her returning back to her confident, blunt self.

Robert

I hope you don’t drag out the conversation between Bill and Fleur. She needs to stop being so passive about this when she’s already admitted it to herself and Harry. She’s hurting both of them by dragging it out like she is. It has to be a firm conversation. Her passivity is the only thing I’ve disliked about this story. It just seems so out of character. I hope we can see some romance between Harry and Fleur in the next two chapters. I’m concerned it’s gonna be 1 chapter that there is just the conversation and reactions and they won’t get together until the 5th chapter and we’re barely going to see any Harry/Fleur (not smut but actual romance/fluff between the two) this would be a good story to have an epilogue for so we can at least see the happy ending that we are angsting are way towards lol Great chapter though, just wish there was more Harry/Fleur and less Bill/Fleur moments Cheers!


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