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Chapter 92 - Bad Habits

🕑 Added 2024-12-07 09:44:33 +0000 UTC

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Nemanja Krstic

You're probably right. Will add a comment and revisit for the novel, if there is one.

Nemanja Krstic

She and the sect master were talking. He was talking, she asked a question, he shrugged and responded.

James Auwaerter

“the incident you caused was so great, you can confirm its extent with everyone in the sect, starting with your roommate, who only survived because I shielded him.” -> This is awkwardly phrased for an elder (“the incident was so great [that] you can confirm its extent with the entire sect”. I think Alabaster should speak more directly. If she says that it incinerated the northern training area and would have killed his roommate, Newt doesn’t need to be told that the incident had a great extent.

James Auwaerter

“while we were” -> who is the ‘we’? This is not dialogue.


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