CaraFalsa
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Lily's Release #2
🕑 Added 2018-08-03 06:30:59 +0000 UTC and the one after that
And the one after that
man she had a lot built up
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Anthony Gigliotti
Commissioner here. This was remedied upon me pointing out in dm that the face expressions were missing. Its fixed on my end... But... Needs to be uploaded here.
DK
Awesome! Glad to hear that! Alright, so I lied. I have a couple critiques, and here they are: 1. I feel like Lily’s facial expression should be changing as we progress through the panels, like from a more desperate face to a more relieved one. 2. There should probably be water in the toilet, unless of course it’s one of those waterless-until-flushed toilets. 3. This is my last one. The toilet is pretty full by the second panel, so, by default, the toilet should be overflowing by the third panel. Hope this was helpful!
CaraFalsa
Yea man always open to anything constructive, gotta improve somehow
DK
YES! As always you do an amazing job with your scar works! I do, however, have one critique, if you’re open to hearing it.
