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Torn Decisions - Part 10b

🕑 Added 2024-05-22 08:05:23 +0000 UTC
Torn Decisions - Part 10b

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Uncreative Writer

Great feedback. Another reason I put them in two parts is because I did not feel like they should go in one part but instead two different parts to really excel the story behind it. I don't want to rush or force anything as it affects the story. I am super glad to hear that the formatting is better! I also agree that the escalation part would happen next after that scene between Alex and Katie. It is coming don't worry I have no forgotten about it. I am just trying to get everything to work up to that. Hope you enjoy the next part and I thank you for your feedback!

NeoBee99

The formatting and pics are definitely better in my opinion. But 10a and 10b could easily be one part...I don't know why it was split. I have seen ImageChest stories with 200 slides in a single part, so I don't see why there was any need to split these two parts. Also, continuity issues - once the b/s started having oral, the readers would typically expect escalation or at least status quo in their situation. But they seem to have not progressed at all. That's my only critique.


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