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Fuck That, I’m Going To Be A Rogue Trader Instead!: Chapter 3

🕑 Added 2025-01-02 18:25:53 +0000 UTC

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Austin

Love the story so far

SirBearington

He's a good man, but you know, a Sub Sector needs someone to lead the local squadron.

SirBearington

Oof, that's a lot more mistake that usual, but I blame the multiple rewrite!

ClassicDom

Great chapter as always. Just some suggested edits for things that were bothering me, feel free to ignore them. "A rarity given the prejudice against the abhumans in the imperium." → Capitalize "imperium". "Is there something in my face, my lord?" → "on my face". "leaning closely as her soft chest pressed against his before she reached down." → "against him" might read better "pant of disappointment" → "pang". "her touch sending shivers up her spine." → "his spine". "before they froze as the older man started to chuckle." → "before she froze". "pinched the bridge of her knows." → "nose". "as she poked her on the cheeks." → "he poked her" "her ears flattered atop her head" → "flattened". "the Gates of Cadia on the bottle" → "a depiction of the Gates of Cadia" might be better? "chaff on a man" → "chafe". "her flicking tail" → "Despite her denial, her tail flicked." OR "Despite her denial, the flicking of her tail betrayed her true feelings." "She was an amazing woman yet none of it would matter" → Add comma after "woman". "it was now just up to true believers" → Remove "just"? "doesn't mean she can treat her like a child!" → "he can". "Standing in attention" → "at attention"

travis btmb

Tftc great job but you do need to do some editing

Bishop7053

Damn onion cutting ninjas. His promotion posting better get him off planet before things go to shit.

RandomAsian

I'm not crying, it's just raining is all.


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