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Jupiter Jet Issue 1 Page 3 - Behind the Scenes
🕑 Added 2017-12-29 19:03:52 +0000 UTCPAGE 3 SCRIPT
PANEL 1 (THIS SHOULD BE THE LARGEST PANEL ON THE PAGE)
The YAY COOL wide shot looking up at Jupiter Jet flying through the sky away from the blimp above a 1935 amalgam city (think New York meets Chicago meets Boston), with some foreign aspects including: many walkways between buildings, there are no billboards anywhere, all advertisements are on the side of the various blimps that populate the sky. Jupiter Jet is smiling very, very wide as she zooms up inches from the rooftops!
1. JUPITER JET: Abyssinia!
2. CAPTION (CHUCK): Tell me, sis … is that exactly how it happened?
PANEL 2
Cut to: Chuck’s workshop in the back of the JOHNSON REPAIR SHOP where JACKY and CHUCK live. The workshop has a lot of wooden tables and benches, stray tools (recognizable and not), strewn about and a lot of half-completed projects, car parts, mechanical toys, Rebu Goldberg machines and WATCHES lying about … it should be evident that the shop is on desperate times. They don’t turn down work.
There is a sign on the wall that should have visible reading: WE’LL FIX ANYTHING.
CHUCK, Jacky’s 11-year-old little brother sits in the foreground. He pulls money out of the sack Jupiter Jet made away with on the previous page. Jupiter Jet stands behind Chuck with her helmet and goggles in one hand (now she’s just Jacky), standing in a dramatic pose as she retells her heroic tale!
1. JACKY: That’s how it happened, Chuck. I promise. Basically …
2. CHUCK: Basically? Jacky, this sounds an awful lot like the incident at Lindbergh Track.
3. JACKY: It was nothing like that! Besides, if I’d gotten Mad Mattie to sign his hubcap it would have netted us a fortune!!
PANEL 3:
Chuck points to a newspaper on the wall with his screwdriver. The headline reads “SOARING SWEETHEART RUINS RACE.” There’s a small picture of a car crash.
1. CHUCK: You almost netted yourself into a hospital! That car knocked you into a thistle bush.
PANEL 4:
Over the shoulder of Chuck, Jacky is all riled up. Finger in the air to prove her point!
1. JACKY: It was a soft landing! I could have easily scooped up that hubcap. His car was only going 50 miles per hour when I made the grab.
2: CHUCK: Jacky! Don’t be dingy!
PANEL 5:
Tight on Jacky. Defeated. Face drooped. Chuck just got her.
1. JACKY: Grrrr. Alright
Comments
We break down every beat and then split it up by drafts. She takes draft one and so on until we think it's right.
That's pretty cool. How do you and Ashley split up the writing?
