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[FREE | Reading Sample] TS - Chapter 1 - Power

🕑 Added 2026-01-21 18:08:01 +0000 UTC

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LunaWolve

This story would be a lot faster paced, yes. But still include quite a lot of slice of life and calmer moments, as that's kind of my bread and butter! 😁

Xavien

Definitely would be interested in reading a series off this. Some pluses, interesting power set with lots of room to be creative, powerset is relatively unique compared to a lot of what is found in the genre. My biggest hope for this would be the potential for it to be a bit faster paced than TAS and ND. I love TAS and ND and your writing in general, but my biggest complaint is that the pacing can often be way too slow.

LunaWolve

Glad to see a fellow D&Der catch the inspiration 🙏 Basing her Power-set off of the Pathfinder 1st Edition Alchemist, with some narrative freedom and flair, of course.

TheWhiteWolves

Looking great so far, not often you get a crafter type super or alchemy in general. Can see the D&D style alchemy list inspiration which is cool, one of my fav things is being an alchemist. Looks forward to future chapters and do hope you find some time between ND and TAS to throw some more out after the initial batch

LunaWolve

Great feedback, thank you!

MyDarkness

First do I like the story. Yes I do very much. This chapter brings it home in a way few stories do in the beginning. The MC is very likable in an angry suffering don’t give a fuck kind of way. Your doing a great job in describing how she views her power and it’s affects. This chapter brings what the book could be more into focus . The only real “negative “ if you want to call it that is in my opinion you have used the word vicious to much. So not really a complaint. This is just my opinion, but I would read this story.

LunaWolve

Never heard of it!

Rainer

Have you read or are you reading Summus Proelium? I think that's the spelling. Your new story is very similar.

LunaWolve

Glad to hear you're liking it! Anything that stood out to you as particularly noteworthy, barring the anti-capitalism vibes?

Jop Drop

Love this thing! Love the way all the capitalist bs makes me think about the boys comics from Garth Ennis. Made me think of money game from Ren a little. Hope it continues!

LunaWolve

Great feedback, thank you! Anything in specific that makes you feel like the power set is interesting? What makes you love the world and character, if you happen to have a few pointers?

LunaWolve

What speaks to you about it? If you can name something specific. Fine with a few cliffnotes, if you got any! 🤔

Zackary Klocker

Big fan of this. The power set is really interesting. Probably one of the more interesting powers I've ever seen in a superhero type book. I also love the worldbuilding and main character so far. I would definitely read more of this.

David Zimmerle

Honestly love this story for only having two chapters.

LunaWolve

🙏😘

LunaWolve

What part do you think is really cool, if a specific one catches your attention the most?

Christopher Jack

This is really cool. I would definitely read this long term.

Redsennin94

Love it! I am already hooked. Alchemie is OP as f.... Not so so much for the start of the cliffhanger. Way to early for that Mr. Luna 🤨


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