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The Reputation [TG, Bimbo] Full story
🕑 Added 2020-08-22 15:03:45 +0000 UTC"The Reputation" <== Click here
"A Highschool senior Kelvin breaks up with his girlfriend since he thinks associating with an airhead like her will make him look bad. She takes her revenge and ensures that he ends up being the biggest airhead in school."
Enjoy and let me know how you liked it ;)
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Comments
Steven Barry
I like suggestions, so feel free to share in the future;) Thanks for the feedback! Glad you like it!
Mirali83
Loved your choice of model for Rachel; she has the perfect look. Excellent use of little triggers for the changes as well. I'm digging deep to find suggestions, but perhaps it could help to think of ways to show rather than tell - for example, rather than just alluding to Kelly losing her interest in sports, mention something about her trying to hold on to her sports memories and feeling proud that she finally remembered that she played wide receiver, which was the person in charge of guarding the net against home runs. That can convey the loss of knowledge more effectively (and can be more fun to write). You're doing great work. Keep it up!
Unit369M
Good story, only photos and gifs is weak.
