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An Otherworldly Scholar - 248

🕑 Added 2025-08-17 05:23:02 +0000 UTC

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dumbo3k

Small corrections, love your story. Original: A lighting whip lashed against me. Revised: A lightning whip lashed against me. Notes: I assume you meant an electrical whip, as opposed to one merely made of light. Original: “What’s taking you two so long? The sparring finished like a minute ago, and Mister Clarke isn’t you to monopolize,” Revised: “What’s taking you two so long? The sparring finished like a minute ago, and Mister Clarke, it isn’t like you to monopolize,” Notes: The last sentence was a little clunky, added the words it and like to make it flow better.

Ben Bass

TYFTC! Thank you for the glimpse into some of Rob's newer students, it is always hard to get as deep a look into them as you introduce more characters as the story expands. Leonie seems to be a good person, I hope she sticks around too.

ElAyVee

I really like Leonie as a character, hope she sticks around with Rob and the crew after the arc. Or at least comes back after graduating.


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