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Chapter 90

🕑 Added 2022-11-17 20:11:02 +0000 UTC

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ThatGit

Thanks for pointing it out, I just use extra line breaks when I'm writing but Patreon gets rid of those for some reason when I paste. Should be fixed now!

ThatGit

Thanks for pointing it out, I just use extra line breaks when I'm writing but Patreon gets rid of those for some reason when I paste. Should be fixed now!

carebear90

I think there is a need for a more visible break when the POV changes to Loraline. She's the Siren Queen? And Maxis was the father of Adara? No clue what the Key is for. Did you mention that somewhere before and I just forgot since then?

y

There's a sudden scene transition between the two paragraphs where Orion falls asleep and the cabal meeting. There should be a divider or something to denote the change of scene.


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