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Book 4 - Prologue - Six months later

🕑 Added 2025-03-04 00:43:11 +0000 UTC

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Kahunabob

About the ending of this chapter. It kinda feels like you're trying to set up both a gangwar / undercity turf war and at least the lead up to the Global Incursion with special guest star Phobos as "The Flower Bulb From Hell". (Queue ominous 50's B-movie horror music!) I don't think the ending for this chapter'd need a rewrite. Maybe you could expand in the next chapter a bit about the troubles the locals got up to in the undercity. And how the Teddy Brigade gave them a whooping? Also, at this point in time... are the bears still part of Teddy as a samurai, or are they basically a Teddy beholden AI PMC corp? Sounds like she's got, what, 2-3K bears all in all running around? Both on Mars and Earth combined?

Shannon Livingston

That was first mentioned in SCS... 5? Depending on how fast things develop it might be mentioned at the end of 4

Shannon Livingston

That's true! Problem is she always prioritizes other people, and beavers are probably out reinforcing the neighboring sectors. She really does need to put bear storage/living spaces in the garage. Priorities will probably change soon, things are out of control!

Shannon Livingston

Dun dun dun!

Simon Casey

Stopping bear production is blasphemy, but yeah some kind of space efficient bear barracks (or even mutiple distributed in important locations) would be a lot better than just having them stand in her workspace like a rave with no one playing music. I think it’s also about time she upgrades her command/delegation capabilities, given the sheer number of bears under her command now. Well, once she has some points, at least.

HikinBear

Dun, Dun, Duuuuunnnn!

Irish Not Sane

Teddy loves tempting fate, it keeps her busy. She really should build something to store her bears in and stop making them tell she has it.

Joshua Millins

A panda butler? Nice. Now we need therapist red pandas. Ending would be the potential of Phobos becoming an ork Rok?


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