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TBoB - Book 4 - Chapter 4 - Lockdown Protocols 

🕑 Added 2025-03-10 16:45:12 +0000 UTC

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Shannon Livingston

She's got a lot of fronts, and not enough commanders. Bob is more... leading by example normally. I think Teddy's first priority will be upgrading another one of her team to take over from Bob. I think it'll probably be deadbeat, since I have a sidestory I want to do with Dusty, but we'll see how things go.

Shannon Livingston

Ready to roll into action!

Shannon Livingston

Hmmmm... thanks for the feedback. Trying to dump all the lore and such before getting to the action, so it's a little messy. You're right, could be briefer. As for the tactical system, probably not THAT much, but the problem is she'd probably need a new catalog, and Teddy is out of points. The real problem is part of her command structure is stuck in montreal, and there's no one to replace him... yet. Probably see either Dusty, or Deadbeat getting the upgrade soon to fill the gap, but we'll see how things go.

Kahunabob

I know that leaving you hear, so you could concentrate on the town defenses would probably be the best idea, the antithesis have thrown new shit at me far too often, and you’ve almost always been the best counter, so you’re coming. "hear" => "here". Lose the comma in that sentence. End the sentence after "... the best idea." Start new sentence with "But the antithesis... too often. " New sentence "You've almost always... coming with me / coming along." I think you're trying to show Teddy word vomiting everything out at once, but from a reader's perspective it's better to use shorter, staccato sentences. Gives the same vibe, but you're not losing half your readers after the 2nd or 3rd comma. On a side note: how many points would it take to give Bob a strategic/ tactical / command and control overlay programme to put him on par with, say, a good captain or commander level human? Or if that's too expensive, a competent, experienced NCO like a Sgt Major or Gunnery Sgt?

Irish Not Sane

Poor Bob but it’s understandable, Teddy needs to look at filtering the tanks before they can dump into the lower city as she’s already cleaning up the pond down there. Love seeing Teddy in command combat mode

Joshua Millins

Now this feels like Teddy. The Beargradier General is so back.


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