Patrefans
Wombat's Writings from patreon
Wombat's Writings patreon

TH - Book 2 - Chapter 15 - Pitstop Pivot

🕑 Added 2025-01-13 21:07:56 +0000 UTC

Comments

Irish Not Sane

Why am I surprised this was the emergency? I absolutely love she’s already drinking in celebration

Kahunabob

Around the part where you describe the situation with the mountain towns you double up on the "most towns"/"most of them". And a bit later on you do the same with "willing" when talking about aquatic training. You might want to consider an alternative line for the same context to make those sentences flow better?

Shannon Livingston

When she called Mom was probably sober, and probably wanted Reina's opinion on the best way to keep him in jail. Started celebrating sortly after that. All three of them have quite the history, and I hope I can do it credit tomorrow.

Joshua Millins

While urgent that's not quite what one could consider an emergency... I get it the man was worth less than a Model 1 in a hurricane. But still.


More Creators