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Sketch #425
🕑 Added 2020-05-06 09:36:12 +0000 UTCHere's the sketch, along with the comments I sent Wondollar:
Panel 1:
- Bring Charity's lines closer to the bottom? Kind of feels odd to me that they're so far from her. It also disconnects the text from the visual gag (staring at Alberta's butt).
- Add a small dotted line showing that Charity is staring at Alberta's butt (see my feeble attempt).
Panel 5:
- Make Alberta's last balloon a whispered instead of a spoken line.
--Jaycee
[EDIT]: Wondollar sent me a revised version, which I added to this post.
