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Sorry to be petty, panel 5 last sentence, remove 'and' then you will be sorted.
A suggestion; remove panel four and move the dialogue box from panel 5 up to panel 3. Knowing that Adine does not want to talk to her parents is enough to allow the reader to think how Amelia would respond to that without seeing a reaction, it would also make it easier to read the page. On top of that, take the dialogue from panel 2 and move it to panel 1, move around text boxes for reading flow.
