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Reincarnated as Supergirl - Chapter 16

🕑 Added 2022-12-02 01:28:47 +0000 UTC

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AlliterativeArts (Eric Faust)

Suggestions. So many suggestions in the Doc... It's a bloodbath I tell you.

CapitaoCav

Thanks for the suggestion, gonna start leaving a google link for anyone who wants to comment on it at the end of the chapter from now on. Also, fixed what you suggested.

AlliterativeArts (Eric Faust)

You might wanna include a Google Doc or something to allow "reader suggestions". I have an almost pathological need to correct people... Leverage my pedantry? ~~~ "Well, you understand if I don't take your word for it?" => "Well, you'll understand if I don't just take your word for it?" "your shield doesn't fully block particles, larger physical objects or metallic ones." => "I imagine your shield doesn't fully block 'mundane' particles or protect against physical objects." "the field block bullets and other projectiles based on their speed" => "the field blocks bullets and other such kinetic projectiles" "unique weakness, given that you're" => "weakness. Given that you were simultaneously paranoid enough to activate it before meeting me but equally unworried that it doesn't block physical attacks, I would say you don't fear them." "Flight, thought enough not to fear bullets," => "Following flight and fearlessness towards bullets, the next most likely power would be super strength" "She has to get better at hiding things if people could guess so much." => "She had to get better at hiding things if there were people like this running around." <<>> Slowed down after this point "she did talk about the light," => "she did talk about the Light," "He took a drag on his second coaster" => "He took a drag from his second cigar" "Hah, is not" => "Hah, it's not" "Going away so soon miss Kara?" => "Leaving so soon, Miss Kara?" " "I'll keep that in mind." => "I'll keep that in mind." "After waiting for tem minutes Kara" => "After waiting for ten minutes Kara" "the man seemed to actually admire then." => "the man seemed to actually admire them." "Friend Troya" => "Friend Troia"? I always get the spelling of her name confused. "house of mystery" => "House of Mystery"?


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