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Will of the Force - 29

🕑 Added 2024-10-29 02:18:46 +0000 UTC

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Christian E. Y.

Yup. For a full display of PRT hipocrisy, I'm expecting them to bring her out to ask him to pretty please not take over the city.

Christian E. Y.

I just got into the patreon to read this chapter so I can't deny I was a little disappointed by how short it was, but I have to agree. Sometimes a chapter just reaches a good stopping point, though I'm not sure if that happened just yet. Could have added a flashback to Vista and what happened to her after her power up. I wouldn't call it a second trigger since it feels more like the Shard Network and/or the Simurg just wanted to boost Vista's power to further study Anakin. Or perhaps a scene with Dinah and Tattletale, showing how they collaborate to get rid of Coil, or at least one with Lisa going through ER and then talking to the PRT. Eh, at the end of the day, if you feel it was a good spot to end, I guess that's what matters, tho. I just hope that being aware it was the shortest chapter in the story so far means the next one will be soon-ish

Christian E. Y.

I thought he was gonna make a "terminator army"

Soulxlight

Canon. PRT and Protectorate goes to great lengths to disassociate parahumans from guns. Either using them or having them used against them. Very few conically use them. Victor, Militia, Lisa, and Skitter are the few in Brockton

Soulxlight

Not the best test subject since she's an Eden para human. Her safe mode "dying" shard doesn't really ever go active. It's like a bricked computer with one active program that isn't accepting new data.

Richard Davis

It's enjoyable and well-written. I'm pleased he spared Marissa .. and thankful she has a respite from 'Ziz.' My heart hurt a bit when I saw Anakin's decision to give up on the law enforcement. I wonder if he could have achieved a detente with them. ('We've hurt one another and there is much to regret. See where conflict leads us. Let's leave each other alone.') But now there is an intent for conflict on both sides.

Justin Archibald

This is the full truth. He has led men into battlefront in every conceivable condition,with every kind of enemy, and weapon type. All while being a walking weapon of mass destruction. Dude is going to change the world just because it is what he knows will work.

Glitched Knights

Pretty damn good job Cav. From my limited attempts at writing, some chapters just end up being short on their own. You just do you, and if you feel like everything is good, then everything is good. Take it from someone who keeps fucking up. That, or keeps running on fumes due to work. Both suck

Mac-something

He’s destroyed one galactic superpower and replaced it with a second, then destroyed the second on a whim. In between all that overthrowing planetary governments and crushing revolutions was pretty much the day job. Frankly he’s GROSSLY overqualified.

Mac-something

Honestly I wish more writers would have the discipline to know when a chapter is done and put down the pen. So many common writing sins in web fiction stem from a desire to inflate the word count.

Mac-something

He’s a man of habit I suppose.XD

Mac-something

Inside Tae-Soo’s head: ‘Choosing to stick around post-Lung is going to be the best career decision I have ever made.’

Michael Rojas

Deep Heavy breathing in *Disposal Unit*

Mac-something

Knowing him someone else will suggest something and he won’t bother to contradict them. For my money ‘Susanoo Domain’ feels thematically appropriate.

Mac-something

Nice work, I admit I was wondering what you could actually do with Marissa, but using her (hopefully ethically) as a test subject to understand the weird eldritch entities behind the capes makes complete sense. I’m sure Darth Plagueis approves!

Mac-something

It’ll be an odd experience for Anakin. Pretty much his entire life he’s been someone else’s enforcer. Heck he’s still approaching the current situation with the same mentality even though he’s now the man in charge.

Austin Barrett

I'm glad I decided to get your patreon to read these chapters early, I'm enjoying the story and looking forward to the next chapter!

JaggerBone

He is gonna build his own 501st, isn't he? 🤣

nugitoBambino

great chapter! I love his comments on just using guns and deciding to bring war to the area. I'm pretty sure it's either cannon or WoG, but Contessa is the one that prevents regular humans from just shooting most parahumans (at least without it being a thinker plan or something). Anakin, however is natural Contessa counter

CapitaoCav

Honestly, I usually aim for at least 3k words, but I don't just stop when I reach the mark, so the chapters end up a little bigger. Still, I just realized that, at 3.1k words, this is probably the shortest chapter for Will I ever wrote, but it just felt like the right place to stop, any more and I'd just be inflating the chapter. I think I acomplished what I wanted with this chapter, any more and it would just be... well, useless words. Also, thanks!

Gabriel Waldorff

Very good chapter, a bit on the short end but one should not sacrifice quality for quantity when writing. I detected almost no grammar or spelling mistakes. Outstanding work!

Gabriel Waldorff

New Imperial Republic would be a cool name. PRT could assume it's referencing the Japanese imperial, or Chinese imperial, when in it's just Anakin poking fun at both the empire and rebels

Gabriel Waldorff

He can do it to, he has a wide breadth of experience. Both before and especially after he was a Sith.

Gabriel Waldorff

New Imperial Republic. Ya know, just to stick it to both the empire and the rebels because Vader doesn't like either.

Bob the builder

Don't worry, it was a great chapter

LordChoto

Hahaha oh the sick irony of Dinah being thought of as a hostage but her being around was the limiter to Vader deciding to say fuck it im taking over

White Neko Knight

I can't wait to see the Nation he'll build.

Kadili Man

So what is Anakin going to call the gang once non-asians join? The Grand Gang of Brockton? The Human Bad Boyz?


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