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Never Die Twice 4: Impulsiveness

🕑 Added 2020-04-13 13:55:54 +0000 UTC

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Joel Sasmad

You have Duke and Spook. I say name your new deathknight Mook.

Void Herald

Thanks, and I completely agree. I think the only story I read with heroic minions was the fanfic Trailbrazer, which says a lot.

Parker Groseclose

'Since he had twice more health points than special points,' -Since he had twice as many health points as special points, or something like that. It flows really weird here climbed the walls to hide in dark corners of the ceiling -This may be a nitpick, but try putting 'in THE dark corners' another womanly voice added, wiser. -wisely instead of wiser I have better to do than avenge my fellow necromancers, -'I have better THINGS to do than' Spook didn’t even question him and escaped through the tunnel, -think about taking out 'even', helps the sentence flow better Love the idea of this story and where its going. I've always said one of the top five reasons I'd go supervillain was for the minions. Heroes never get minions.


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