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Never Die Twice 7: Shopping Duties

🕑 Added 2020-04-24 16:22:47 +0000 UTC

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Void Herald

Thanks, corrected, and happy birthday!

Parker Groseclose

and whose swarms could strive in the harshest conditions -I think 'strive' should be 'thrive' and him seeing you doing merchant duty will disparage our class.” -No real typo, but the sentence is a bit jilted Annie, if you want private lessons, you do as you wish, -'you MAY do as you wish, sounds more snobby and noblish putting a finger on her lips. -this one's a bit nitpick, but think about changing 'on' to 'to' This was a pleasant birthday gift for myself, and I thank you for it! I love both your stories and cannot wait to see where you take them.


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