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The Perfect Run 102: Moving On

🕑 Added 2021-05-29 06:56:29 +0000 UTC

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Joel Sasmad

I think it is alright for the most part although I think your right in regard to the bit with Len.

Finn Ryan

I kind of agree with you, this chapter was weaker than usual. Felt like the characters were reciting a script rather than talking to each other. I am not an author obviously so take everything I say with a mountain of salt, this is just my opinion.

Alexander Dupree

Thanks for the chapter

Bob of Doom

Probably because it doesn't focus enough on the true protagonist of the story, Eugene-Henry. He did heal Shroud, but beyond that he took a nap as is his right as the true hero of the story.

That Guy

I like the fact he isnt getting together with Len because of the dynamics of the time travel power and their past history. In a real relationship were those two to get together their past and the time travel burden would hang like a sword of Damocles over top of them and probably inevitably end their romance on very bad terms. I like livia and feel she is a much closer fit for him mentally because of their shared time related power and the burdens they are each used to carrying.

Deinos

It works 🤷‍♀️

Bunny Waffles

I think it is pretty alright. However if you feel you wanna go back and revise it cause you don't think you gave it the time and attention it deserved then go ahead and do so. It is your story, you know how you want it told.


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